More revision

Adding dialogue to writing makes a story more livley. Today we looked at different ways one can include detail.

First I shared two of my writing examples with the students and right away they noticed how my first writing had only the spoken words in the dialogue but the second one had words and additional action to show what was happening when someone was speaking.

Then we looked how we can include how something was said or use a variation of the word "said."

Finally we looked  how the spoken words can come first, last or squeeze the speaker in between them.

Examples from: Crafting Writers by Elizabeth Hale

I haven't looked at the revised drafts yet. Tomorrow I will find out, how much of what I showed, the student chose to try out in their writing.
We will continue with revision for the next two weeks (word choice and sentence structure next week and text structure the week after.)